Am I going down – intensely shivering when the shelter is gone?
Thus rain and wind empowered its force, the feeling of emptiness echoes through the storm. Nowhere to go, delusion says the truth. It’s been miserable to believe in me and you.
Two stars circles around each other, nor getting closer nor moving – forever. Words like drops falling forming tears, frozen by pride, by their master squeezed.
Colours of the rainbow reflect what I see – black and white, but the rest do not exist.
Curse the faith, curse the falling star. White dove could not reach the path to my heart.
Thunder out there scream out loud to me, burning the sky on my way, to see. The reason and fear almost holding hands, pointing the one who deserves all that.
Utterly soaked in the rain that falls, willing to disappear to reset what I have done. Mirrored again, pale face presenting the scar – holding the last piece I wish could survive.
This has so many lines worth to be quotes or recited while talking Poetry, Philosophy, Love, Death – while sitting in old leather armchairs with a good glass, surrounded by old splendor, listening to the storm outside, the rain drumming on the windows. Almost like Lord Byron and Shelley that one stormy night – Brilliant! Love your style.
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My God – are you willing to intimidate me? Even so, this is how I feel. Your words are too sophisticated for such a person like myself. Deeply appreciate and hope I won’t disappoint you.
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First off, my apologies for coming here late. I read a couple and the one where I felt my words wanted to really have their say, sadly comments were closed. No matter! What matters is I’m here now to savour and to devour your writings that lure me like poetic prophesies. Your diction is impeccable and your poetic-prose style is commendable. I know I will not be disappointed, Matthew. Here’s to more power to your mighty pen.
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I’m not having words of response having such a comment. Feel honored to the depths of my heart. Didn’t realized that I have turned off some comments, let me see!
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I have changed settings so you’re free to comment whatever you like. But not the way you did here – its embarrassing! I should print it off and frame it π
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Um whatβs with these unusual comments? Lol π€
Beautiful poem
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Unusual comments? Explain yourself π
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Appreciate so much. There is still a lot to improve!
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In this poem or just in life?
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Both. There is always something to improve, knowledge to get and skills to master π
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Does that mean that youβll change this poem?
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No, I won’t change poem once is done and published. It means I will search for improvement in my skills to write better next time.
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Got it. π
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Thanks for another wonderful article. The place else may anybody get that type of information in such an ideal approach of writing? I have a presentation next week, and I’m on the search for such information.
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Another beautiful wrote. There is something about this poem that immediately reminded me of reading Frankenstein β Mary Shelley. Maybe itβs your use of imagery , but itβs fantastic. Keep it up!
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Your words are way to much for such a newbie writer like myself. Frankenstein is just above the level I could ever dream of. Thank you!
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Frankenstein is by far one of my favourite novels and also – the book that inspired me into my love for Literature and Writing poetry myself. When I read the beginning of your piece , that is instantly what I associated it with.
And besides – Shelley herself was a newbie writer once π
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I’m honored. Hope I won’t disappoint you in the future, my style heavily relies on moodish writing – also dark side of the matter – so being associated with Frankenstein novel is motivating me to work even harder. Sure she was, who knows what brings the future! π
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Thank you. There is e-mail subscription bracket on the right hand-side down to the bottom of the site. Appreciate!
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I really this so much! It’s really so true!
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Youβve been nominated
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Wow. Thank you! I’ll crack on it within a couple of days.
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I agree with the aforementioned comments. Beautiful imagery! Looking forward to your βnew writingβ.
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Your emotions are so apparent in each word of this poem which makes you a really good writer. I reckon you should use this format very often because it showcases who you are in the most beautiful way possible. I like your writing style very much and this piece is just the bomb!
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Your comment blown me off my feets!
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You know exactly how to pen down thoughts beautifully. Loved it. β¨π
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You know exactly how to pen down thoughts beautifully. Loved it. β¨π
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This poem has such bold imagery, I really enjoyed reading it…it reads like a natural flow from mind to pen, to me that’s just how a poem should be. Looking forward to reading more of your work π
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Thank you!
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I loved this a lot.
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Happy readers, happy writer! So glad you like this one.
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Last line packs a surprising punch!… well done!
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Arigato! So happy you like it!
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Doumo doumo π
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About your new format of writing: as I read how rich with imagery it was, I began to think perhaps I was more in touch with you than I had ever been due to what appears to be stream of consciousness coming forth. I enjoyed this poem immensely. But I should say that I followed you after reading one or two of your poems because you’re original and gifted and you emote whichever way you choose to write. That’s your gift as a writer. I’ve never been disappointed with your work. But the mood and imagery of this one wowed me. I wish I knew more of how you created this poem. Most of all, thank you! Poetry needs you!
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This is what is called feedback! I have never received such a kind response to my writing so far and I am literally shocked. This one was hidden in my head for a couple of days, but it is not as personal as it looks like. A mixture of everything – inspirations, thoughts and feelings. Appreciate your words about me and my writing, it means a lot. Thank you!
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You’re welcome! I appreciate your explaining where this poem came from. It fascinates me how poets write. Thank you. And be well.
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hmm what about my feedback π anyway good luck
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Didn’t said your feedback is bad as well π Thanks!
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yea yea I am a bit jealous now :p
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